Hi Laviniah, I really enjoyed reading your story and really enjoyed the way that you described your main events with flash words. To improve on your story I encourage you to paragraph your story. Also it'll be awesome if you could tell us in your story what was your favourite part and why. From Gerry.
Hi Laviniah, I really enjoyed reading your story and really enjoyed the way that you described your main events with flash words. To improve on your story I encourage you to paragraph your story. Also it'll be awesome if you could tell us in your story what was your favourite part and why.
ReplyDeleteFrom Gerry.